請問這篇英文文章有什麼問題嗎??? - 社會議題

Possible cause of bullying
Buiiying in my perception were really has a variety of types, and it can be happening on anywhere you
can see, such as schools,offices or work-places, we have to know, it is happening all the time especially
in school.
Although I have never been bullying and never happening in my class before, but i can still
hear about something like that in my school, I think the most important reason of bullying
was because of the other students who wasn't sufferer doesn't want to involved with the trouble.
Except the reasons of top, I think our goverment need to found more orgazination to help
sufferer of bullying, and make sure the bully wouldn't get back at student who report,
if we do, the people have more brave to report this thing.
The homeschooling was also important, sometimes we can tell by homeschooling to know the child's
behavior in school, means if child to be a bully, their parents has responsibility too, if we have
well homeschooling it is not just good for education it's also benefit our society.
The bully like lions in Africa, they always pick the most weak cattle to hunt, but I always
say:if cattles can be unity and rush to the lions together, I believe lions must to run
away.
Update:
我做文寫的 文法上應該有錯誤
最後一句我想改成
"該逃跑的就是獅子了"
但不知道怎麼下筆 謝謝!!
Update 2:
呵呵 這麼慘....
Update 3:
那介意幫忙指導一下嗎
Update 4:
恩恩 大大說的有理 我已經在最快時間內又打了一篇
相信錯誤還是會不少 再麻煩各為的指教了(文法真的該好好學了)
http://tw.knowledge.yahoo.com/question/question?qi...
我又新開一篇題目了
這題佳解還是會給您 麻煩稍等幾小時後 謝謝
Update 5:
呵呵 點數不能回收
我的文法程度應該是國中都不到
平常看看cnn新聞勉強還行
但要我寫作就頭痛了